CK Lynn

I'm past 15, 000 words, so I'm hoping that counts as yes and not maybe. Half is up in Advanced Critiques.

Very, very cool. I love the wings, they look awesome, and the castle below is a great addition. The shadows and darkness really set the mood.

This was very generic. There isn't much about the narrator, except that he loved some girl and she doesn't love him. You haven't made anyone care, and that's the problem. ...

This was pretty good, but it seemed like only a start, not a whole piece. The language is very nice (clatter instead of bang, is good) but I must say ...

I like this (it's kind of hard not to.) The only thing is that it could be longer. It's really hilarious :) :)

I really liked this. It's very different, and you can really feel the emotion. I just have a few nitpick things to say. 1) the lines that you wanted to ...

6/10 :)

I get the meaning, but I wish you would have presented it in a more original way. This si something everyone's seen at least twice. It was a decent poem ...

This was good, but I don't get how the title has anything to do with the writing. I like the uncoinvential lyrics, though; they're all gaa-he-likes-me. You don't need to ...

The ryhmning really detracted from the rest of the poem, but it was good. I noticed a few spelling errors (told, not tolled, what is a ting?) . This would ...

The way you described love is really different here. Like "I am the patient , you are my dose", making this a good thing instead of the usual alcoholic/alcohol example. ...

I liked the individual lines, but all together it was-as you said-chaotic. There wasn't much that made sense. I kind of got the feeling that the narrator was thinking about ...

^ September Wars

The only good verse in here are 3 and 5, but they are almost tresspassing into emo territory. If you added more about this person, who they are, what they ...

First, please capitalize your I's, even if it's just in a message on the top of the real post (pet peeve of mine). Second, this isn't really a poem. It's ...